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| E.Maginitive 2008-04-27 ch 1, | abuseI think if you had made this into a real book with more details, information and such, it would have become one of those books that become highly renowned with lots of awards. A book a kid may look at and think, How boring looking. But it's actually very deep and interesting. Very nice job. -Erica (I sign this review with my real name because I have a high respect for this short story) |
| j.c-chic 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abusewow, good stuff :) |
| Cara 2008-02-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseA well-written, thought-provoking piece. It's interesting different people's reactions to the Gatekeeper and the After. The Mac-Windows analogy for atheism was amusing, but effective. However, I (and I'm sure I'm not the only one) was wondering how Elizabeth died. Also, from what millenium is Gabriel? It makes me wonder how long Elizabeth has been there... |
| Bored Psycho 2007-12-03 ch 1, | abuseI really enjoyed this piece and I completely adore the idea of it too. Just one question though... How did Elizabeth die? (It's rather random, but I'm curious to know why she died so young) :] |
| Pop the Bubble 2007-09-14 ch 1, | abusethat was gorgeous.. i really loved this definetly a fav for me now =] x |
| ditto's cadence 2007-08-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseI loved it! Very insightful. |
| ccaltuna13 2007-07-02 ch 1, | abuseThat was pretty interesting. Okay, actually, I don't know what to say about it. It was really well written, and definetely made me think. Thank you for writing it. |
| Chidori Nadare 2007-06-04 ch 1, | abuseThis is just amazing...It gave me a new perception of heaven and hell. I like how you showed the different aspects of humanity. I also like where Elizabeth rediscovers her humanity through Gabriel and ending it with Elizabeth entering the Gates. All in all this is just great work. Keep writing! -C.N. |
| JojoAnn 2007-04-23 ch 1, | abuseI thought it was AMAZING! And surprisingly Gabriel Elliott was annoying but I grew to really like him. It did make me think... a lot. I agree with some things said, like how the borders of countries are only in our minds. I thought I was the only one who thought that. Well, of course other people think like that but I've never heard that from anywhere but my brain. Anyway, I really liked it. The writing style fit perfectly with the story. It's one of my favorites that you've written. Looking forward to more of your story. And I know the ending of this was perfect. It really was, but I can't help but wonder what Gabriel did after Elizabeth left? Did he stay as the gatekeeper? He had such a good personality. He clashes with the perfect heaven everyone imagines. I'd really like to know what he does next. And do they ever meet again? |
| Sasha 2007-04-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseI love this story, its a different way to look at heaven and hell. It made me think about religion and the role it plays in my life. |
| Krimzonrayne 2007-03-13 ch 1, | abuse...I'm not sure what I just read... was it a master piece? a childish incomprehension? a badly answered question? portrayal or more question? I'm not sure... I spent a good ten minute reading that... and now I'm just not sure... the ending left me feeling rather happy for some reason... This is what I derived from it though... something like, the Universe is perfect but it isn't just. Mankind is imperfect but we're beautiful and fair... |
| slvadrgn 2007-02-03 ch 1, | abuseThis story was a real thinker. It's a very enjoyable plot. Good Job! |
| Crewger 2007-01-21 ch 1, | abuseI love it |
| Le Creature 2007-01-06 ch 1, | abuseThis was very nice reading. I kept thinking, "With this set up, you really could do some fun things." You win points for having a good premise, and following through on keeping it interesting. Certain parts felt a bit rushed, and your section breaks are a bit distracting. There were one or two typos that caught my eye. This is the sort of thing that could almost be made into a television serial, and not be a bad one at that. Well done. |
| Leina 2006-12-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseFantastic. So Gabe was marked off as Hell, eh? Prolly a good thing he agreed to let Elizabeth go. If he took the Podium, he'd probably set a few folks straight REAL quick. |