Reviews for ZYLX: Dirge for a Necromancer

Reviews For: ZYLX: Dirge for a Necromancer

Loiya 2008-03-26 ch 21,	abuseI love this story, read the WHOLE 21 chapters in one day ;)it is a deep dark story... I admit, the ending is not particularly satisfactory, but it fits, and it makes sense in the end... after everything. Love the style you wrote it in... That was a good book.
Talerce 2007-01-07 ch 5,	abuseMy, but Raettonus is a complete jerk. Trying to cure a plague just to get people off of his back, being unpleasant to everyone around him, mistreating Brecan who is thusfar the most likable character...He just isn't very nice. But he does make a good narrator. Jerk that he is.
Talerce 2007-01-07 ch 4,	abuseAnd once again, the story flips tone. Where last chapter was fun and adventurous, this one is darker in comparison and unhappy. I think I see a sort of pattern coming along.
Talerce 2007-01-07 ch 3,	abuseWow, this chapter was so different from the past two. The past two were introspective and sort of brooding, and this one was full of adventure and wonder. I mean, a bunch of cute mermaids with realistic personalties, a demonic unicorn trying to eat a human and then trying to befriend him, and minotaurs. A load of fun!
Talerce 2007-01-07 ch 2,	abuseA strange chapter. Very abrupt. I think it could use some polish in word choice, to help with that. I mean, it starts off darkly cheerful, then moves to depressing, then ironically happy, sadistically happy, depressed, and then excited. Is the narrator supposed to be a manic deppressive? If so, I really hope he doesn't end up like any of the Anne Rice vampire characters. shudders On a better note, at least the story is moving forward, with the book and all.
Talerce 2007-01-07 ch 1,	abuseFirst thing I must say is that I like what I read. A lot. I think I will favorite it, so I don't accidentally forget about it. But as for reasons...Your descriptions of just about everything taking place in the story (Characters, settings, items) are incredibly rich. Well fleshed out. As well, it was interesting to read, and promises many more. I would know that even if there wasn't a stack of chapters after this one. There are a few things that seem off about it. Aside from a handful of spelling errors, the narration was strange. Not the first person view, or the fact that it is a guy telling about his life from the important beginning. Those are fine. But the tone of the narrator's voice is uneven throughout the entire chapter. Added to the way that the chapter seems a series of related vignettes about Master Slade, and it is sort of discordant. Still a damn fine read, but something to think about. Oh, and the main character's name is weird and awkward. Props on that.
jikap 2006-11-27 ch 21,	abusei actually read your profile, it always brings a smile on my face when i read "no one reads this anyway". the story was tragic, and full of dead people, and for some reason, i liked it ^^
Nobody Wants Reality 2006-11-26 ch 1,	abuse"It seems to me now that my life really should not have been the way it was. I was the eldest son of a very wealthy family…...at least; they were wealthy before the famine. All their money was dwindled away during it. The money seemed as though it might run out because of the famine but my father..." -- This could have been written somewhat differently. It is somewhat repetitive and the "at least" seems out of place. "My memories of that day are quite clear, despite the haze of all my other memories of that time in my life. I still see it some times when I close my eyes and try to sleep. The rain had let up and there was mist every where. And corpses. Lots of people were dieing because of the famine. There had been so much rain for so long…..nothing could grow, it all drowned. Master Slade was riding through in coarse black robes on his great horse, a creature that could’ve carried on the night on its shoulders, and behind him the dead were rising and following him mindlessly. It was like the grim reaper himself was riding through the village." -- I love that. the short sentences make it seem like he is recalling it on the spot. The dialogue and description is almost perfectly balanced. good job! Well im off to read some more of this : ) ~ Nobody Wants Reality ~
Sophie Ulquiorra Allen 2006-05-07 ch 1,	abuseThis sounds like a very interesting story. I am interested in necromancy myself (as a power for one of my characters) and I can't wait to see what you have next. There were a few typos here and there, but nothing that a good spellchecker can't fix. Keep writing!
Meina Vonta Rayne 2006-04-17 ch 1,	abuseIt's good. Well written. I enjoy your style. I think my only problems were the occasional typo and the elongated ellipsis. One example is 'dieing,' and the other '...' instead of '...'. But all in all, it was a fun read. Great job.

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