I like how you putted this in a way where we all can relate, which is awesome. But i don't quite agree with the ending. If we were to strive for something to our hearts desires then wouldn't we need to break out of our shells in doing so? or is that a play of foreshadowing? Nice work anyhow, I look forward to reading more from you. :)

Oh awesome, this was really good :D I absolutly loved the title too, but what I liked the most is the bold words you made out clearly... Keep it Up!Good to have you back :D and hope to see more soon

Can so relate to this! That used to be me. Great job! Well done :)

All I can say, rock on and keep on writing, this was inspiring and one of your best poems!

Melanie

*claps* Good job! You're right, people can totally relate to this. At least, I can. It's really deep...each line has something powerful to say, with such great impact. Nicely done.

SO TRUE SO TRUE NICE JOB

Hey Babe,Am loving this, its so beautiful and inspiring and just so good, and its one loadsa ppl can relate to. love you darl,

xx-xx

BRAVA BRAVA BRAVA!

This is awesome! I really do like the title...reminds me of Mulan. Hee. Love that movie. But I really can relate. Your parents telling you to do something, yet you don't want to or you know that you don't like the path that they have chosen for you. And you can't stand up for yourself due to the fact that you don't want to upset your parents. *sigh* This is a really great poem that I'm sure that many people can relate to. Great job!

Very good. The bold words make it read well and the authors note was a good idea.

This was a really good poem, nice flow. I liked it. Hope your day gets better.

Sincerely,

the Stranger in the moonlight.

i wrote something like this (of course, you manage to express it much more effectively) and the way you describe the walking makes it very open for people to relate to and like, your writing is straight-forward and also heartfelt?"To stop being so shyBecause it's putting a limitOn the places I can walk to"i liked best...