I'm sorry i can't sound like an english major ala juliet, but what i can say is that i loved this and so would your grossmami

Cute. Very cute, and I love the way you described your grandmother, it's so...so young and refreshing. Nice job.

I like how you balance this between yesterday as well as today. It really is a strongly themed piece. Honestly I loved it in its entirety, to pick out my favorite parts would be to pick the whole poem, and there's no changes that I think would make it better. Wonderful piece, characterization, narration, and detail, all A. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.