I guess you weren't going for the 5-7-5 format, since you have 5-8-6. But this is a good poem all the same I can really relate to the message. Keep up the good work!

very nice! Wonderfully written!

I can so relate... great job...

Hmm...pretty nice, but you could have written so much more to it! It would have been a lovely start. Again, no offense intended, but why write on such depressing subject matter if you believe God makes you happy, etc? Hmm...I'm confused on your writing motives and your religion, but that doesn't make you a bad writer. Wright on!