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| AnimeV 2006-02-25 ch 1,  | abuseThank you for your very nice review (just so you know I am not very good at rhyming, but that type of poetry called for it), and I love how descriptive you get, but I especially love how you used the butterflies and moths to make your point. Right now I am having a difficult time putting it all into words, but the bottom line is that you have done an excellent job. |
| Out of the Orange 2006-02-06 ch 1, | abuseHm...very interesting. I like your word choice and a lot of the phrasing you used. I thought the ending was especially good. This is the type of poetry I like a lot, I guess. One suggestion: for your own sake, improve your summary. Don't ask people to "r&r"; also, use capitalization. It will make you look more polished. :) |
| e a t i n g . f l o w e r s 2006-02-06 ch 1, | abuseThis is such a powerful poem. Great usage of words, themes, etc. I loved the lines "Only an autopsy will revealthese secrets tattooed on my ribs." Very good detail! Keep it up! |
| plastic figurine 2006-02-06 ch 1, | abuseWow. Love it. You work your words well, they create a pretty little picture inside the walls of my brain. Only an autopsy will reveal/these secrets tattooed on my ribs. Lovely. |