Smooth!

wonderfully written. i had that jackson song stuck in my head while i read it, but whatever.

wow! *applauds* i'm speechless.

"like jesus half-conceived" now THAT is perfect, i seriously fell hard for that line. oh, this is sosos pretty. i love the whole thing, honestly. love it. love it.

~* noelle

i like how spark-of-the-moment it is. and how very ironic it seems (to my eyes anyway). the first line is my favorite. brilliant

How lovely this little stream of conciousness. I love the line that starts with 'like jesus half-conceived' some powerful imagery and connection there. I also like how fast this runs, how everything comes of the tongue at the same speed.

brava, J.

I like this. It reads like a poem, very smooth and fun to read. Good job.

~Leeona Trance

How unashamedly creepy. Brilliant.