Once again, I congratulate you on your incredibly smooth flow. I like your style I lot. ;)

Keep writing!

wow. you managed to rhyme non-cheesily! congrats, not too many do. i like how there is no clenching line saying "ok, it's done".

a sort of delicate simplicity that portends much anxiety & suppressed hysteria - that forced-calm feeling. gorgeous poem.

Beautiful. Your rhyme and rhythm are perfect. Great job.

There's almost a twist of irony in the ending. Good work

Wow! I love the varied vocabulary and the rhythm. Incredible cool; it gave me this clear picture of a dead body. *shivers* Keep it up!

Whoa. This. Is. Amazing. I love the rhythm of it, your rhyming is beautifully done-not forced or too much...I am jealous.

Love xox

Great poem