 Prophetic Vixen 2006-02-09 . chapter 1I really like it, but I have one problem with it..."the **, the stoners and the drunks" you seem to be implying that it's the girls that are screwing the guys over, not the other way around. Keep that in mind: a guy who gets laid by six different girls is a pimp, he's cool as ice...but the girl? Who did it once with a boy she thought she loved, she's the **? Sorry, I know you didn't mean it like that, and this is really well written. I like the ABAB rhyming and how consistant it is. Good job. |