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| Forgottenunloved 2008-02-01 ch 1, | UPDATE DAMIT. |
| Between2Worlds 2006-06-10 ch 1, | awe come on you cant just leave it there! Please write more soon. The fear is so powerful I can taste it!! ~Keep writing till your heart's content~ |
| Wyngz 2006-02-08 ch 1, | By all means you must continue, although I have to point out a few things. I sort of got lost at the end. I realize that she was in the chapel but you weren't explicit with the details. Details are wonderful and I do struggle with that myself. Another thing I noticed was that you don't seem to know the difference between There and Their. She would be there soon. Soon she would be theirs. I also noted a few spelling mistakes and I was slightly amiss about why she was running. More detail on that fact would be lovely too. It was just a little hard to get into it but I do believe you have talent and if you'll just sew up the odds and ends, this will be a perfectly lovely, graphically violent story. My favorite. ^-^ I would like you to post very soon. |