Please update again soon! I love this!

Finally a native American slash story. I loved it.

I think you captured the language barrier perfectly.

That's just like me, to read an uncompleted story even though I know it hasn't been updated in two years and fall in love with it. Why do I do this to myself?

I read your profile and hope that you still want to continue this story and that the editing will be done soon so it can be updated. It's REALLY good.

Hey. I am going to review properly but I just had to say something because it...we'll call it...humoured me. 'that way that two boys could make love'. I think I just ruptured something in my stomach by laughing so much. Seriously. I will sue you. :] Expect a review shortly.

Hi, I only started reading this today, and I want to tell you that I enjoyed it very much. I've always wanted to read a story with a plot similar to yours...and please I'm not lying or anything like that. It's the truth..unfortunately people don't write stories containing slash about indians and the settler. Oh well, I just want you know that you're doing an amazing job writing this. I really like your writing style and the way you describe the scenes and characters. I can't wait to read your next chapter, please update when you have the time! Take care. 8D

wow! thIS is LIKE awesome! please continue

Awh, please hurry up and update this. I miss it.

I LOVE this! It's so fascinating style of writing, and I loved how you wrote Hawk's skin was simply like carmel--like the candy~! How sweet. :) I'm already a fan of Hawk and Timmy! (since chapter one)

Do you have any idea how old are the characters?
Hawk?
Timmy?
Sky Watcher?
Sturdy Plant?
Blooming Flower?


But everytime I seem to comment for the first time or add to alert, no one updates.
I just might be a bad luck tick. :(

I just hope you update soon! :)

So hey... It sure has been a while. I miss you... and I want to read the next chapter really really bad so PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update? ::puppy eyes::

Keep going! This is great! I've never read a western shonen-ai...I love this!

Hello! Wow, I have no idea whether you're still updating this or not, but either way...I'd like to point out a few things here. But before we get into all that, I'd like to point out that one of the things I really really enjoyed is how you handled the language barrier between Timothy and the rest of them.
Now...
Mainly, I'm going to go with some grammar and stylistic things. On the style side, what I noticed very first was the profusion of adverbs. From my writing bible, The Elements of Style by Strunk and White, follows this piece of advice: "Write with nouns and verbs...it is nouns and verbs, not their assistants, that give good writing its toughness and color."
Second, the dialogue; the capitalizationa and punctuation thereof: "'Hello,' said John to the bluejay." "'Hello." John always hated talking to the bluejay." "'Hello,' said John to the bluejay, 'and how are you?'" "'Hello?' called John to the bluejay."
Also, it is always a good idea to use periods at the ends of your sentences. Capitalization is usually very useful, especially in proper nouns like the names of your characters, and well-used commas make everyone happy.
The thing is, all of this could be easily fixed with a quick run-through. I understand if it's fun to write and you just want to get it up and get the reviews, but please please please care enough about your work to make it look professional. It has a lot of potential.
Ugh, I very much hope that I didn't sound super-bitchy. It's just that I feel that this fic could be very good if you get past the grammar.

This is good. I like it. You have a good style. Keep up the good work!

Weird as this is to say, i like it! UPDATE SOON!


~Carly

o hot indian sex! plz update soon, ur story is really good!

hey there^^
that story of yours is super cute. a bit simple but stil^^.
wind has a family and a home and he is just fine with beeing kiddnaped? he exepts his fate a little bit too easy, neh?
anyway, i like the characters and i had fun reading the story.
i hop you go on writting,m looking forward to it.
big smile and thank you!!