 star blanket river child 2006-02-13 . chapter 1Love the penname, first of all. And the rhyming for this is good. Normally couplets bug me, but you pull it off well. "How come I’m not allowed to fix what I despise? I wonder…..can I turn the clock counterclockwise?" Excellent, excellent, excellent line, I love it. Great work, keep it up! |