Wow. Do you know I think your talented? Your work is very good.

Aw, this is so cute!

I like the rhyme-scheme you used in the poem, very nice. I love reading poetry like this!

Thanks for your review!

Hope to hear from you soon!

~ Cactus

Mm, I like the thoughts behind this. But the rythym seems really rocky in many places. Try to keep it consistent and try counting the syllables to keep it steady, or reading it out loud. And just a few of the rhymes seemed a little forced. But I like it, nonetheless, like how you illustrate her fears through your words. Nice work, and keep writing.