That same friend I mentioned- well she's better at employing metaphor than I am, kind of like you, but I wonder if you feel any of this or if it's just your imagination. The closest thing I ever came to writing surreal is "Conjugation 101," otherwise I write someone based on a certain emotion. I was never good at metaphor

i love the way it seems like one huge metaphor, interpreted differently by everyone. i love it.

Really love this dear. There are a few mistakes I caught like in the fourth stanza you capitalize the 'I' in the second line while you did not capitalize 'i' anywhere else in the poem. Also in the last paragraph, the comma in the second line after 'that she cannot be without)' should be fixed.

But otherwise, wunderbar dahling!

cheers Junkd

wow . . . this is pretty incredible. i had to read it twice cos im stupid.

I like the way that you've so delicately interspersed the abstract and the concrete in this. Kind of like spinning concepts around action. The way that you slide words in and out of dialogue is wonderfully well done. Excellent work once again.