Reviews for On A Winter Night

Fiore Chnudth
2006-08-06
ch 1,

abuseHope this review doesn't get too messy for I had many different associations and ideas when reading it.

In the beginning I thought it would be the prologue of some horror story. Moons, old houses, darkness, clouds and so on. But it didn't become that. Quite the opposite unless more chapters follow with a severe twist in events.

There was also a feeling of closeness/confinement to it in the beginning. This was probably meant as intimacy which became clearer as the story progressed.

I think the best parts where when you described through a sort of poetry. It was just on the border of being silly sometimes, but it remained very personal, which I like.

I didn't like him just asking her to be his girlfriend. I would have preferred if he maybe kissed her or built up to it by maybe them lying wathcing the stars and then the conversations went more personal.

I have personally been in a relationship that goes from friendship to romance, and without pretending to understand women AT ALL, I think you hit the feelings the girl I knew had. At least to some, boiled-down degree.

So, overall I thought it good and quite sweet.

KH

KHL

PS: I know you're Danish, so I should tell you that so am I, and the rink where the skated made me think of the one just outside Frederiksberg Have (that's the Garden of Frederiksberg to you english speaking people). Don't know if this was in your mind too!?

violin-lady13
2006-02-11
ch 1,

abuseaw... that's really cute. i like it, especially the way they both skate together, even though she's a figure skater and he's a hockey player. pretty cool. nice job.

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