love the song. i wonder how it will sound with music but i enjoy the lyrics anyway. great job! :)

ooh, funk-ay! *does random disco*... *cough* yeah.

First, thank you SO much (reviews). At first I didn't know who it was. But you're back! And apparently you've been back, but I've been gone. *shrug*. Anyway!

Okay, I like this waaya mucho. I think it would sound better with the music ('cause there is music, yeah?), but I like the lines you put in the summary-

"It's all I do / Mess you up / Mess me up more"

They convey the feeling of hurting someone and ending up hurting yourself more than you hurt them wonderfully.

I also liked the part where you said that you love them because everyone else has walked away. Completely true. I'm more of the "push everyone away 'cause I don't wanna get hurt type", but I get the idea.

Alright, enough rambling from me. Lovely, lovely, lovely.

(and thanks again!)

~Leila*

i like it, its very different and i love the way you keep repeating the word "weird" very effective!

I like this a lot. Great song! Really well written and I can relate to it too. Keep writing! V x

Well, it's repetitive when you're just reading it, but that's okay--I have the feeling it'd be so much more effective as the song it really is. It'd be nice to hear it with the music you have in mind.

I really like the "And I know you know/ By the way you stare at me" lines, by the way. Nice job.