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| DiaRose 2007-11-07 ch 1, | abuseOh, lovely! Love, ~Dia |
| Dreamof-Roses 2007-08-26 ch 1, | abusevery rhythmic and imaginative -- i actually get an image of a beautiful, yet fiercely angry creature with golden wings... shimmering thinly llke melted caramel. intriguing poem! Thanks for sharing, Katie Kat. |
| fairyxflames 2006-11-16 ch 1, | abusegood job i dont get the "caramel hunger" but the other adjectives have nice tones |
| sarah1491 2006-09-23 ch 1, | abuseWell, the title says it all! No, I'm joking. I liked it, even if it made little sense. The italics gave it a great effect; that "majestic" feeling you were going for really showed through. Nicely done, again, even if you think there is not much sense to it. I still like it. :) |
| wildwolffree17 2006-06-12 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. Very natural flow. |
| Katterree Fengari 2006-05-06 ch 1, | abusemakes me what to go "aww, poor baby" lovely imagery by the way. "Caramel anger" is curious. Nice parody |
| youzi 2006-03-19 ch 1, | abusebasically the title captures it all..but i love the honesty.i also love the fact that you tried to implement a rhyme scheme in this piece...it flows well, to say the least. do keep writing :D |
| e a t i n g . f l o w e r s 2006-03-09 ch 1, | abuseya know what. I don't hate you. so I read some more. Just for you. And this..wasn't too bad. I like it more than that "other" stuff. It just flows better. "hope stained glory" was a good line. I'll give ya that. Just...be nicer to people! I would be your friend if you were nice. ^__^ And if you speak german too, that would be cool. B/c I love german. |
| With Rhyme and Reason 2006-03-08 ch 1, | abuseAh, but it does have a meaning. I like the rhyming in this, and the images, as noted in your title, are rather majestic: "Suffocating in the darkness / That burns ashes and drops acid rain." Very nice. |
| setne 2006-02-28 ch 1, | abuseI found this interesting, in a good way. Though I have my doubts about the title, I like the content. Well written! |
| .dear. Disaster 2006-02-15 ch 1, | abusebeautiful thx 4 the pointers in the review, hav any suggestions 4 it tho? |
| hey maria 2006-02-13 ch 1, | abuseUh. Unlike the other two reviewers, I'm more inclined to read this as a satire? With the title and the summary I would think so... Anyway. This poem is full of "beautiful" phrases like "hope-stained glory" and "burns ashes and drops acid rain" but it doesn't really say anything. If it WAS a satire, good job. If not, I'm disappointed in you. :P |
| Kat-Renee Kittel 2006-02-12 ch 1, | abusecaramel anger would be hot caramel, just melting hot and sticky all over, maybe?? Hard to get a fix on the picture being painted, save the word--betrayal feels like this... Oh, Confessions of the Literal Minded is up on my blog now. If you go to my profile and click on my home page... It will take you there. And yes it has your copyright and pen name and everything. Thanks for letting me share one of your best works to a new audience of folks. -Reni. ^..^ |
| brokendreams21 2006-02-12 ch 1, | abusePretty. "Caramel anger." O. That's really cool. I liked that phrase the best but your other ones were just as great. Your poem is so beautiful...but obviously in a sad (literally) way. Awesome job! |