Oh wow, this one is actually quite scay and very painful, shows the hidden parts of people who just back stab you in the back, *coughamandacough* Really great job dearie, Love you.

Interesting

Aww! I know this feeling, and you express it well, as well as all the confusion and the pain that comes along with it. And I know it wasn't really supposed to be funny but "I’m not just some lousy bum" made me laugh P Anyway, thank you for the very kind review, and I love your pen name. )

love the last two lines: 'but one of these days, in that game, i'm going to win/ and once i do, they'll slowly watch my frown turn to a grin.' that's right. i came to the same realization myself last year. great job with expressing it so well.

-i heart that guy

Vengeful spurt, ne? Lol. I really enjoyed this poem. You have a great knack for rhyming. Too bad this poem has to be truthful...-sighs- People can be evil at times. Ah well, that's life for ya. )

this is really good, i loved it...

Very inspiring. Bravo! :)

violent.i am not much to rhyming though, the basic it would make it seem a bit more mysterious, you know?

sigh life is simply full of pains and betrayals i understand the feeling nicely done

keep writing!

Loved it! I can relate. Great flow, awesome write. I'm putting this on my Fav story list. Hey, I sent ya an invite to my site. Come join up with us. (other writers from here) It's a great place to have clean fun and get to know each other. Keep on writing you are very talented.

It's sad but at the same time, uplifting. The transition that you potrayed from innocent to realizing is so well writen!

good poem...I liked the last two lines the best because they really bring the whole thing together