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| Setsuna529 2006-03-25 ch 1,  | abuseThe parallel structure of the stanzas works very well with this. I think the 'fear' you write about is very realistic and easy to relate to; to me, the poem seems like an invocation for strength, to protect the people closest to you. Great work. |
| simpleplan13 2006-03-23 ch 1, | abusethe repition is great and I think we all have these fears its not really your best, but its still very good |
| Skittle Trees Exist 2006-03-10 ch 1, | abuseeres muy super! |
| lronMaiden 2006-02-27 ch 1, | abusegreat...really great. I like the repetition of the concepts in every stanze, ei. what you fear for followed by what the fear is, what you do to stop the fear realising, and then the consolation at the end. There are no wasted words, it's concise yet conveys much. Thank you for reviewing my poem, i'm glad to review yours. |
| method acting 2006-02-22 ch 1, | abuseI love the last stanza. This whole [iece is just...clear cut. Plain, but still beautiful .Tehre's nothing twisting about it, just sturdy. Fine. I'm listening to some hella gaelic tune (best of the chieftains)Bais? |
| al-Salil 2006-02-21 ch 1, | abusewoah dude, ace stuff. i am gonna try and review all ur stuff now. i have updated on the artists tale, your gonna love what happens.hope to speak 2 you on msn soon.email me sumtym |
| callmebelle 2006-02-20 ch 1, | abusebeautiful poem... i can completely relate to it. my favorite part was "...Have to smile and not to hide, behind a fake mask." truly amazing job. |
| Ben Wuest 2006-02-17 ch 1, | abuseJ, man, what's going on? It's about time you updated; haven't heard from you in forever. Bunch of things to tell you, hope you're online tonight! B. |
| Hidden Lies 2006-02-15 ch 1, | abuseNice poem, I think i got most of this today. my only fear is that i'll... uh... 'slip'. Great work though. |
| xDistortedReALiTyx 2006-02-13 ch 1, | abuse*cheers* I loves it! And I really know what you mean-even when things are going really good, you're always afraid something will snap...Keep it up.--pammy- |
| dana-maru1 2006-02-13 ch 1, | abuseAs always, an excellent poem. Can relate to your feelings so well. Keep up the great writing! |
| Jess 2006-02-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseok one thing i gotta tell u is(if im right by wot ur sayin "That one day I might give in,") U R NOT GIVIN IN!! if u even try.. i dunno wot i would do (i was goin 2 say i'd kill u myself, but then u still end up dead =S) if it doesnt.. its a really good josh =).. missed readin ur stuff.. Luv ya XoXoXoJessie - Kate |
| Winter Reflections 2006-02-12 ch 1, | abusei hope this year will be a good one. a couple of bad things have happened so far, but i am praying. nice poem, it is very honest, and i like how you are telling yourself what to do, such as to not hide behind a mask, and you have to be kind if you want things to stay together. it is really good. keep writing!! Claire |