i really like this, its a cool idea. i like the line "i'll eat you with my fists." i thought it was just fantastic.

something i might change is that the last line is a litlte ackward - one little change that makes it run more smooth I think is "A bitter aftertaste I miss"

good job! keep writing!

The sound that this creates is wonderful. Great word choice.

I like this, short and effective! ^_^ Good work! Write on!

~Anna~