Tiny typo in line five, but other than that, I really dig it. This is a style I see a lot, but usually don't like, and yet somehow, you make it work.

Great work.

-pictographic.love

you have this thing with this monster who appears in many of ur poems, I wish I have more description of It. pacing is well-done, n how u insert repetition effectively kinda reminds me of my own style, very appealing indeed how u do that,

Good ending, very nice read.

well thats od and original. but also very cool. oddity is cool and originality is hard to find recently. good poem. though and error: And feel to the floor in tears' shoudl be fell.