Wow! Excellent writing. I know someone with schizophrenia and you've hit the proverbial nail on the head. The story makes so much sense, do you do much research into yrou writings? I've been to HPFF and will definately look up your works there too.

Keep up the great work,
Viscera.

That was freakety!
The whole time, it was like, "What the crap is going on?!" And then, "Oh... That was weird."
I loved it.
It could use a little bit of fleshing out, but It's still really great as it is.

That was very well written. Though the dialogue could use a bit of work. The story was very interesting though. I hope to read more soon. *hint, hint*

Yeah, I caught on the "this is not real" thing after noticing that the last two fake words were too much like the word '$hi*'. It went a smidge fast for me, but I liked the magic twist.

wow, this was interesting. i liked how you twisted the plot- it was neat, but i didn't really like the last line. Maybe it was because it seemed so blunt for this story. the reader kind of concluded that the girl was mental. it was good! keep writing.-kay-

p.s. thanks for the review!

A tad bit weird... I think you should have introduced the character a bit more though.

more...please

I think you captured the fearful paranoia of a schizophrenic outbreak very well. Kind of reminds me of my mother and granduncle--schizophrenics as well. They don't usually call them schizophrenic "attacks," but rather "outbreaks."I must say, you do a lot of good one-shots. Great job!

Tschau,Sam

This was pretty good, i can understand the schizophrenic part of it all. Nice job.

Nice work. I thought it was very...interesting. ;)

~Ivy

kinda of weird... i would expect someone to be a bit more panicked if they're family had been kidnapped... or even call the police or something. she seemed to believe them quite willingly. It's a good start, I just wish it seemed more real.