Wow.
I love the moments that poems can put you in above any other aspect
And it feels like you dug up a piece of amber that happened to be filled with these two.
Satin and syrup-coated lyps
with lyps spelled as it is makes this one of the more sensual and lazy (in a good sunday afternoon way) pieces I've read.

Outstanding.

Wow...this is...makes me shudder! I *adore* this...it's so creepy! The ending is very spooky, and leaves the reader uncertain about the meaning...I love your formatting, and the words you use...good job! Love, Mia

getting blown out of the park by this...i'd like to quote something outstanding from it but that would result in me pasting the whole poem here. everything in it is just as it should be.

mezzie

Wow - so she was just a figment of his imagination? Powerful poem - very cool. I love the second line.

amazing poem, and the formatting is fantastic. the ending is the cap on it all--great job.

This is quite possibly the most beautiful poem I've ever read. It's gorgeous. Wow. Just, wow.

interesting. Really makes you think. What is reality? Maybe this is all just someone's daydream and it will all end with a teacher slapping his yard stick on the desk... Who knows... Loved the poem, btw

Your way of formatting poems, are unique I must say, nobody else does it this way. Anyway, good job! "breathing lost in lies confessed between satin and syrup-coated lyps" I loved that line. You have a way with combine random words and still make it all sound good.

Your formatting is so curious. Lovely, entracing. I'm in awe. Beautiful job. Just, beautiful.

this is so powerful.amazing.you have talent. truely.

Oh my. Lovely.

Another absolutely beautiful poem. Your style is so unique and powerful. Really love this piece, some great lines. Well done x

How wonderfully well spoken. The voice in this is magnificent. It seems the voice makes the reader catch their breath to keep up with the flow. Excellent image and sound creation. Great work.

wow such pretty imagery, and the title reminds me of Harry Potter for some reason. anyway, nice word choice!

This is beautiful aslan.

I love the beautiful feeling I get when i read it, like I want to be her.

Valentines day always makes me really sappy and romantical hehe.

I love the almost erotic romance that is drawn into this. Stunning *smile*