“Sweet. That is magnificent. I adore your power! I’m so very fond of it!”

You have a very endearing way of phrasing things, and it is the fun energy of this story and the adorable mixture of archaic and colloquial language that adds to the charm. There are areas that require improvement, such as the over-descriptive tags attached to some of your dialogue - the dialogue is quite excellent, by the way; flows fluently throughout and seems to tease explicitly the main character's 'uselessness', as well as the framework of the 'fantasy' genre itself. It's always important for a writer to have fun while they work and it definitely shows in this piece.

Answering your review: British printing practice requires single, not double quotation marks (yes, I am British - or something like it). And contrary to popular belief, single quotation marks should never signify that a character is thinking.

I reposted this short that accidentally got deleted... It's my first... Captian Lucky liked it and found it interesting, as well as Lachem!