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| toadster 2006-07-29 ch 1, anon. | abusethe thing is, when you read the poems of people who strive to imbue their words with their selves, you get acquainted with the person unknowingly. all i can think of is how earnestly you would love the people in your life (and I don't mean love-love, you know what i mean)if you expect love to save you...obviously you believe in its power, and you must practice it. and i don't mean to intrude personally, or presume to know anything about you. your poem struck me as a very personal confidence. |
| chaos called creation 2006-03-25 ch 1,  | abuse'there’s a feeling when you breathe and your lungs fill up with water' That is an awful awful feeling.'the vacuum of religion' that line holds so much. 'as you swim in charcoal waters without sound.' -that- line has to be one of the most imagerous lines i've seen. highly vivid in my eyes. 'jar of snowflakes mixed with fire' -smiles- immediately made me think of fireflies in the winter, pretty. the next stanza is my absolute favourite, i think it should be 'delivered' in the last line though. surprisingly, i haven't seen the term 'incandescent starlight' in a lot of poems so kudos for coming up with it first. I think the last line is just a bit abrupt since you started with such long lines, but it kind of gives off a clash of clairity as well. so, if that was what you were going for then... very nice :) keep writing! you're great at it and i want to see more stuff *pokes you threateningly with a pen* |
| Precious Death's Whisper 2006-03-25 ch 1, | abuseI'm stunned! This is an EXCELLENT masterpiece. The first line made me stay, the last one left me in a state of bewilderment. This is a VERY good work of art. I encourage you to WRITE ON! =) ~PDW |
| sunshineofyourlife 2006-03-20 ch 1, | abusenice. i like it! --Sunshine |
| too many stars to count 2006-02-14 ch 1, | abuseamazing really sint good enough.this is possibly my favorite of yours. good job sara(hands you gold star and a lolipop) |
| betalight 2006-02-13 ch 1, | abuseThis is SUCH an adorable poem. I like your way with words, how they get all disjointed. Ha - U.S. postal service doesn't rush deliver anything! Anyway, nice poem, I kinda really like it. |