This is really good! The only little thing I saw was that you used "upon the couch" a lot in this paragraph: "but my body is already prostrate upon the couch. My mom steps down the stairs and sees me upon the couch." If you HAD to change something I would replace an upon, but it isn't that bad :) Again, I enjoyed this a lot. Write more! I like your writing style.

With loads of hugs and gummy bears, ~Kitty

Who'd you have to write this for? And when in the year was it? I don't remember any of the teachers making us do something like that, but if it was in second simester, then that would be the time I was in a totally seperate class from you, and we didn't rotate teachers.I like the story, but I didn't know what the prompt was. What was it? Gr, I want to know! :P

~Me~