I really like the way that this is written; it has so much energy! I especially like the ending line. Very well done.

I'm really glad you reviewed my work so I had the chance to look at yours! I really love this piece...I think we've all been in a situation like this before. I love the imagery and the ending...it makes this work. Thanks for posting :)

There's this air of desperation with the last line that I just love. Honest to goodness, love.

sweet very good i like it

oh and thanks for the review!! ^_^

love ya lots regan

This really good keep going

some very vivid imagery~ i like the to~i like the tona and mood you've set up~ good work

keep writing!

Very good repetition of stanzas. The feeling comes across well, as the situation is developed so well. Excellent work.

Oh so elegant.

"and the road shimmers like still water / The radio fades in between the white noise / and a dusty song from our parents youth / For some reason I want to cry"

I especially loved that part. Fantastic job!

that's increadibly sad... i like the way you have used imagry and metaphors...

Aww...how sad...great transition, though...lovely work ^^

I love it.. well described.