Good for a first try! I hope your hard times pass quickly!

nice...i liked it a lot...good job for a first try...

W4J

I think that being able to rhyme is wonderful, and for your first try, this was pretty impressive. However, I don't think you should sacrifice the dignity of your poem just for the rhyme scheme... 'my friends are starting to suck/everything is yuck' sounds a little corny, unless that was what you were meaning to say. Sometimes you end up trying too hard to fit in a rhyme when it just won't come. I usually find it easier to make every other line rhyme or something, it usually comes out sounding more fluid. Just a suggestion. I know the feeling that you're writing about though, and I think you expressed it well. Good job ;)

nicely done~ the rhyming work well for the most part, just be careful to not force it too much~ otherwise, great job! it's good to express your feelings, let it out, keeping it all inside is the worst thing you can do~ hope things get better

keep writing!