|
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| Erin Jane Lingo 2006-07-01 ch 1, | abuseWow. This is awesome! I like this... well written... a little odd, but great. |
| The Dark One 2006-04-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like the rhyming pattern. I understand what is going on but the rhyming really drew my attention. |
| eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee 2006-02-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou were right when you said it was a fragmented poem. o.O It was...it appeals to me. ;-; -hugs it- >:D Yes, the infamous e returns. |
| Novacula Amor 2006-02-16 ch 1, | abuseVery fragmmented indeed. The way it's put together is very interesting too, as is the poem. I like. ^^ |
| Lostoyannaya 2006-02-16 ch 1, | abuseWell, for a ramble it's quite concise! It reminds me of a cross-between the text uttered by Poor Tom and the Fool in "King Lear", only in a modern context. I'm fond of it muchly. ~~Lostoyannaya |
| Cynicalness 2006-02-16 ch 1, | abuseNot to be rude, but it kinda sounds like a demented Dr.Seuss story. |
| Vivian Rose Pierce 2006-02-16 ch 1, | abuseFrantic and moving. Feels a little forced, but it's best that way, I think. |
| Fyodor Van Doren 2006-02-16 ch 1, | abuseI would say that you should put this in the poetry section, but now that I think about it, it's not poetry. It has no meaning. This is a deconstructionist's playpen. There is no meaning, except to the author. And even then, I'm sure there's little there. |