Wow. This is awesome! I like this... well written... a little odd, but great.

I like the rhyming pattern. I understand what is going on but the rhyming really drew my attention.

You were right when you said it was a fragmented poem. o.O

It was...it appeals to me. ;-; -hugs it-

>:D Yes, the infamous e returns.

Very fragmmented indeed. The way it's put together is very interesting too, as is the poem. I like. ^^

Well, for a ramble it's quite concise! It reminds me of a cross-between the text uttered by Poor Tom and the Fool in "King Lear", only in a modern context. I'm fond of it muchly.

~~Lostoyannaya

Not to be rude, but it kinda sounds like a demented Dr.Seuss story.

Frantic and moving. Feels a little forced, but it's best that way, I think.

I would say that you should put this in the poetry section, but now that I think about it, it's not poetry. It has no meaning. This is a deconstructionist's playpen. There is no meaning, except to the author. And even then, I'm sure there's little there.