Very interesting poem, but good. I like the flow and the way it is structured. Well done.

dark and humorous, what an odd mix. lovelovelove the first line because it reminds me of a song. ohsobeautiful.

~* noelle

wow this was lovely! i love the ending, it sort of seems really singalong and cheerful, but there's an underlying negative tone to it. i like it!

the last lines were just so perfect - they fitted in so well. in fact, everything flowed so brilliantly. loved this so much. great writing.

I love this poem. (: Great style, well-written, especially the last two lines.

laladida ♫ *whistles*

Great dark humour. I found this poem tragic in a way, and that the speaker is suffering and only trying to drown out his/her troubles by chanting "la la la...". The last line strikes at me, confirming that the speaker is mentally unstable. This is very powerful.

haha, it is so true. happiness is overrated, it leads to denial and insanity. good work

keep writing!

The ending had such a punch to it. Truly wonderful. This really reminded me of sister act, because of the happy day line. Keep writing!

The last two lines are powerful.

EB

paha. how great!

It's all cheerful and skippy! It's great! :D loves it