very sweet and pretty. nice work.

A bit too abstract. You may have enjoyed writing it, but there isn't enough meat on the bones for me to understand it. Limitless subjective interpretation isn't something I enjoy.

But there is a certain minimalist beauty about the poem. And it shows a mind willing to try and create things different to the vast and boring mainstream. For that reason alone, keep writing, even if this isn't my sort of thing.

Oh and don't read my poetry. It is awful, I'm in the process of updating my account.

Who knew so few syllables could mean so much. I love this.