You are talented beyond mere words. I stand quite stunned by your brilliance.

-i’m the outcast / on my knees / they are the gods / i could never please- Huh?

-in search of perfection / never to be found- Do you really think that? Or is this, like, one of those things you feel like when you're just overwhelmed and sad (I've thought this before too, it's just that it can't possibly be true. Because if it is, then God lies. And He doesn't.)

-words of promise / arms holding me tight / give me an opportunity / to hold on / to this serenity- I like this. A moment of illumination amongst darkness; shimmers of hope and Refuge. I like that ending very much.

Wow. Nice, well I mean it more then just nice, it really gives you a picture of what your try to say. Very good work, I like.

This is a big, jaw-dropping "WOW!" Its got the metaphor of gods, the metaphor of sex (whether intended or not), constant references to helplessness and torture, even a feel of torture to it, but serenity throughout it all. Wonderful piece! Truly wonderful! -Immortal Nyght

Very well written, i love the rhyme and the flow of the piece in its entirety, well done, amazing!!

The imagery is very powerful. Each image: gods, shadows, light, raindrops, etc. gives such a strong picture of an emotion. I liked it very much. Plus I like the word "serenity". ;-)

The thought of being given a chance at redemption and peace by the addition of the light is a very fitting metaphor. It speaks of true grace and love. It turns darkness to shadow, making things clearer and more distinct; and allowing you to see the path before you.