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LuckyCharm.698
2007-01-28
ch 1,
Awwe! i got a really good picture with this one! bitter sweet, my favorite kind!!
ScarletDreamer
2006-04-06
ch 1,
That's beautiful. So bittersweet. Amazing. BRAVO!!
incandescent.smiles
2006-03-29
ch 1,
Hey! Sorry I haven't reviewed in awhile... some *stuff* has been going on lately. Thanks for your reviews, as always! :D.

Aw... this was sad. Cute and pretty, but sad. *heart breaks for the poor boy while attempting to smother him with hugs*. Tragically beautiful.

My favorite line was...

"Rememberance, but a dream of his touch"

I have no idea why. It just made the poem for me. *shrug*. I also liked the ending line, where you just used a comma instead of a conjunction. It made it a teeny bit jarring, so you're instantly feeling sorry for him.

Anywho, I must go. Loved it as usual.

~Leila*
method acting
2006-02-28
ch 1,
Woah. All right, see...I went to Ireland and met this boy. Blah blah, I've changed and I loved him. Whatever. So, anyways, I've been writing constantly about him (I'm working on a full sotry right now) and our meeting but I never once considered it from his view. This piece really does that for me. (See, because shortly after we met, I left back to my homeland, mile and miles and miles away. Correlates very well with your piece, eh?) So...yes. Nice pice. Some of the Godly mentionings seemed out of place, and bits were choppy, but aside form that very cool descriptions. And I do mean cool. Like, easy breezey. You know? Flowing in an awkward way, edfinatly. It would have flowed amazingly if not for some lines that mussed with it. In any case, nice piece. Thanks for sharing.
Thinker-Girl
2006-02-27
ch 1,
It's beautiful. The imagery is amazing, it seems so real.
mizu no kokoro
2006-02-25
ch 1,
wow... it was like a dream... too good to be true~ lovely work

keep writing!
Kusje
2006-02-23
ch 1,
This.. was very detailed with imagery. I liked this alot. Great job on this.
Rosanna28
2006-02-21
ch 1,
Wauw Alex! This is beyond beautiful. I loved the line 'Out of order, but everything so right'. This is such a great poem, you did very well!

Much love, Rosanna.
in theory
2006-02-20
ch 1,
Mm...unlimbering, so entrancing; I get images of just after sex imagery, disentangling after the act etc (not to be graphic) it's just the kind of sensuality you feel after it. And it feels delicate, raw, with a natural grace. Pretty.
Moon-Chaser
2006-02-19
ch 1,
Beautiful. The way that you use words is always wonderful. I like the last two stanzas.

Keep it up.
lost-in-rhapsody
2006-02-19
ch 1,
very sweet...you use such vivid words and flowery imagery, i can only say this is bittersweet...

- by the way im also dancingintherain, lol, so I'm still lovin your poetry!

keep writing~
twistedtruths
2006-02-18
ch 1,
Great stuff! I loved the flow of the words and the discribtion. It was really good. Great job.
eighteen hundred
2006-02-18
ch 1,
I liked this, actually. I didn't think I would, but I did. I think some more interesting diction would improve it greatly, but as is, good stuff.
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