Such a short poem is really good. very good descriptions. Please read and review my stuff.

i like the movement in this poem and the prose is of the fantasy type, like a piece of chocolate after dinner

hmm, is this your earliest?

well it's good! and i am so serious! the brevity makes it meaningful. this is really very well done

.falls over in her chair, !

ashley

Whoa. cold fire. ice/fire. wow! I love the feelings in here!

...Awesome.

I love the imagery. Very expressive and unique to you.

Please keep writing!

Namir Swiftpaw

And I finally realize that I haven't reviewed "Fallen." Sorry. Well, I still like your poems. Short and nice. I liked the contradicting "cold fire." hehe. Something that I would never think of. Welllllll, see you tomorrow!

Wow... that is... amazing. Just brilliant. ;)

wow. it's sort yet very powerful. hey, great job.

In my opinion, does it rain means problems in the real life? Thus, the "rain" would never end so I am sure that is sinificant for you to have "the ice of the eyes and the flame of the soul" I hope you have a big black wings to fly home. Beacause, black is your colour.

-BG-

BIZZARE!

In other words, "Wow!" I'd almost swear that this was about losing someone, a significant kind of someone, a loved one or something. I think, strangely, that this is my favorite of your peoms that I've read thus far (3 inclusively), and I think it'll be heard to beat. We'll just have to see.

tragic.

pretty.

company in isolation...

me like!

short yet...um...1 word...wow

hihi!

I like the beginning of this poem. Its like this girl is heartbroken (?) or forlorn. The only thing i dont like is 'only a feather remains' sshe only had one feather..how could she fly? hehe..unless it symbolizes something and im being a dummy again..hehe.

susu p0p

Again, all I can say is wow. The first two lines - actually, mostly just the first line - gives me the image of a reflection in a pool or a puddle with ripples distorting the figure. Does that make sense? The second stanza is _very_ well written and intruiging (sp?) structurally as well as what it means mentally. I don't think I like the choppiness of 'Rain. Stop.' but maybe you were trying to disrupt the flow of the poem on purpose. I love the last image of 'flying home' you leave us with. Great work! Sincerely,

Tel