This is good so far. Again, it's really full of feeling. That seems to be your style. The character's already really in dept and you can already get a feel of what she's like and how she acts. This chapter was short and sweet but I still wish there would have been more of it. :D

[She loved to sleep. Sleeping was pure. Sleeping was relaxing. But most of all, sleeping was an escape.] Great intro. :)

It would be great if this was spaced out more, but really, there was a lot of great depth into this. You could almost feel bad/feel like her.

this is itse from reviewers found. this was sad and maybe it would have had a bigger effect if her thoughts were expanded on a bit or maybe spread out over a period of time.
all these things about her seen crowded i dunno how to explain it, too much at a time?

Lovely. Not like all those other emo/angsty stories... not like my angsty stories. XD Love the emotion in it, depth-y to say the least. Hope your muse comes back to this one.

Wonderful. It's not like those other angsty stories that are like "I just want to die because I am a completely miserable nobody."

It has depth.

This is so sad!! Kids can be so cruel! :(

What was this? A short bibliography/life story about an imaginary character? Your paraghraph felt way too big to me and in a real professional story you don't expect alot of parenthesies. By just forming some of the parenthesies into thought out sentences you could increase your word count and rating from me. 6/10. Your story is well on its way to sucess

Hey...this was good. I really liked it. I look forward to reading more.

This is very well written and I like how you start to build everything up slowly. Please write more! I would love to know what happens next!

Oh and just a note on the review you left on my story: when you said you thought of the girl from the ring thats exactly the impression that i was trying to give off lol!

Pretty.

I think it would have been a little bit better if you had expanded this a tad, like maybe having a happy ending? I know is sounds cliche, but, yeah.

Will there be another chapter? Was this just a prologue?

Anyway, it's nice. Good job. Keep writing.

XO

This is really sad, i felt so sorry for her. really well written i loved this. btw thanks for the reviews i realy loved them, but sadly i don't think i'l continure Dream Catcher as i'm currently working on another fic, Superficially Honest...but thankx anyways.