This totally makes sense! And it's really cute. It's almost as if that person is like an angel to you, and they are surrounded by so much light and warmth. And then there's you, and you're like this evil force (though I highly doubt it), and you love her so much that you want to take some of her light to make you into a better person so you will no longer have to be so evil. But then again, you think she's too pretty to take her light from. Lol, wow...I guess it is kind of complicated. But I really like the idea and you can probably tell...because I'm just blabbing on and on and on... Okay well good job!

i really like this poem, i especially love 'you're beautiful, beautiful.' and the repeat of the last line. very powerful! keep it up -erin

You make this poem sound almost like a echo. It has a good overall point, but is kinda confusing. Are you trying to emphasize certain points or are you speaking as two people. Your lines are good, but the flow of this is questioning.