Great last line just sums the whole poem up beautifully and your images are fantastic all the way through. The descriptions are just so delicious you've made me hungry! The title really suited the poem and the whole atmosphere of it felt so dreamy and unreal.

Excellent poem well done x

Wow, I love the alliteration in this. "seductive siren smiles & licorice flavored lips" that's almost a tongue-twister. The imagery in this is divine, and the last line is perfection.

Oh, i love this so much! It's so beautiful and the end is just... wow... you created such a great atmosphere and the imagery adn description were awesome. I love!

i'm not for the swearing in poetry but this was really good i liked it alot...very...how do you say...hmm...i like it yeah...

"and i won't be the one to die tonight"

Oh...jesus.

The entirety is...just beautiful. x

This is amazing...the atmosphere is something that I can't quite pinpoint but it leaves me wanting to read more. Well done!

i ♥ that last line.

~* noelle

Probably my favorite anti-valentine's day poem...very nicely done

P.S...I actually stole the term "Suicide Romance" from the song "Easy Tonight" by Five for Fighting...Shot down 'cause you never had a chance/You took a ride on a suicide romance... I thought it was a very profound line and it inspired me...just thought you'd be interested to know

last line leaves me sighing with regret or something less painful.

i love how you show the narrator from her view and from the guys view. Such a contrast, but realistic in most situations. good job!

"i could never love a girl prettier than you"

& i’m spinning mad-** magic all over your body

Great lines. You know what I like about them is their ambiguity. They could mean a lot of things, perhaps they do mean more than one thing, I'm not sure. I like the ethereal quality of this poem, it reminds me of movie-atmosphere, not-quite-real. Dreamy and passionate and so alive. Great :)

this was so powerful - so amazingly written. i especially love the last libe- great work. this had great imagery and heaps of really good lines. loved it.

This truly jumps off the page. The voice gives this a wonderful credibility. It's like shouting and capturing. Very well written.

"i could never love a girl prettier than you"- it seems almost like an insult

it deeply reminds me of beautiful french girls wearing stockings but are worth nothing more than they are to care.models. bah

my god. i love it, i just... ADORE it. the whole atmosphere, the sickness, the glitter, the blood&arrows&romance... favourites. ohyesindeed.