I liked this! It ryhmed but not corny like poems usually do. Good job.


Review? ->

I LOVE THE LAST LINE WITH EVERY FIBER OF MY BEING. I WAS JUST THINKING ALONG THE SAME LINES TODAY; PONDERING THE VARIOUS PRETTY GIRLS IN MY SPANISH CLASS, AND OVER EACH ONE PLANTING THE SAME PHRASE INSIDE MY HEAD: SHE'LL BE DUST. SHE'LL BE DUST. THEY'LL ALL BE DUST SOMEDAY. IT WAS TO REMIND MYSELF -- IN MY USUAL UNORTHODOX WAY -- THAT NATURE, GRAVITY, AND GOD DON'T GIVE A ** WHETHER OR NOT YOUR FEATURES ARE MILDLY ATTRACTIVE -- THAT, IN ESSENCE, WE ARE ALL "DOGS" IN THE END. VERY WELL-DONE, MI AMIGA -- *FAVORITE*

o, i like this one. It's really cool. I like the image you give, it's like you can see the girl lol, I see this chick walking down MHS halls. lol. Anyway, yeah really cool.-Natsp.s Thanks 4 reviewin my story

I like the rhythm. It's nearly perfect-except that it just feels a little disjointed to me at the end. It might just be me, though.

As the message goes, I like the happy tone-it masks the loneliness I'm getting from the character.

Great writing, keep it up! ^_^