sorry the review took so long :/

anyway, this was, unsurprisingly, another good chapter. Spindler hasnt kicked much ** in awhile, but i'll live with that.

i would suggest adding a bit more description to the landscape and backgrounds, such as the windmill (outside and inside) and the countryside. other than that, it's great!

Okay, I dunno what it is, but I love this story. I like your descriptions, they make it really easy to follow the story. I like your writing style...anyways, ill start with the bad things.

"I don’t have time to heard you little lost sheep along" ~ yeah, that sentence kinda died.

Well, that's it. now for the good: "*! The horses are gone!" ~ That made me laugh!

Aiyowin is such a bad **. I like her, she's my new favorite, sorry Spindler. I'm also curious as to Erryn's nature, and what role he'll play during the adventure, so I hope you update soon. I like the name of the chapter too. In fact, that goes for all of em. They're just a little too short though, which I wouldn't mind if it was a bad story. But it's enjoyable, so an extra 500 words in each chapter would be greatly appreciated (wink wink). WEll, thats it so update whenever you feel like it.

~ demiXgod

Aw!! Such cuteness! And I just finished watching LotR! I can't wait for more, as this is one of my favorite stories! Sorry for the short review, but I've got to dash! Please update again soon! --Nam

when are you going to update, eluza? do it now, please! i love this story, make more! and, uh, kill some stuff!

Spindler sounds like a teenage boy. Maybe he is a teenage boy! Fweeheeheehee!

It seems you have concocted another one while I wasn't looking. One of these days I'm going to just sit down and read EVERY SINGLE thing you have written, and I'll review, too.

Ta Ta...

Yah! An update! and a good one at that! I pointed this out before but FP messed up my review... *pouts* but Anywhoo, whenever there's diologue, it seems to fall into the pattern of, 'the Firedog said' or 'said Spindler', like here:

“Oh, but you look so pretty in them,” Spindler grinned, giving the corset one last yank before tying it off. “What’s in this thing? Wooden sticks?”

“They’re metal,” said the Firedog, straitening her back with difficulty. “Hand me that bell-thing, the white one.”

“It’s called a hoop skirt,” Spindler said, laughing as her legs disappeared. “This lacey thing goes over it, put that on!”

“Are you quite enjoying yourself?” the Firedog snarled. “I’d like to see you wear one of these, you prat! Hand me that red thing.” (lol)

It changes sometimes, but it was just especially noticeable there... Well An Awesome Update to be sure of it! I can't wait for you to update again, in fact! (So please do so soon! 0_~) --Nam

The chapter title is great as is this chapter. Six and half. Lol.

This is great. Only one or two slight mistakes, but no thing major. Nice work.

Well that was an awfully quick update. The chapters are short, but well written. Better short and good than long and crappy, right?Y'know, "Firedog" sounds awfully masculine...I can't help but picture Aiyowin with a mustache whenever you refer to her by her nickname, lol.No spindler this time, boo. I just updated my story so im on a "story hunt" now where i look for good fp stories to read so keep writing and dont let me down!

Your characters have such interesting names! ^_^

Interesting...and I mean interesting in a good way. I like Spindler; at first I thought he was a little kid, then I thought he was a bum, now he's...well, I'm not quite sure what to think anymore! But I love your story, so update soon.

Haha, Your title got me to read this, and I'm glad it did. Nice work. ^_^

I like it so far. Can't wait fo rmore.

Wow! I really like this! Usually I don't read stories that are only one chapter, but the title and the summary got me! (is a total feminist) I thought that the plot twist in the middle was crazy! It totally drew me in.(