  Bryn 2006-10-08 . chapter 1 no words... |
 Xenila Poe 2006-03-13 . chapter 1Huh. You know I really like this. It's different...creative...unique and on top of it all I can totally picture it. Good job. |
| jilly 2006-03-01 . chapter 1 yeah at first i was going to tell you the repetition in the beginning should go, but without it in the beginning the ending wouldnt be so good. (which it is really good) maybe theres a way to diminish it. |
| coal and marigolds 2006-02-19 . chapter 1 I adore the ending, but the repitition in the beginning didn't really work for me. The last line was perfect, though. :) |
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