Metaphors are amazing things. The pictures you create with words are so perfect with the topic. Love your work.

I can feel the sort of digging feeling of going under the skin, and it makes me cringe. Which is a good thing, b/c you were able to capture that in a few words. I like it. Keep writing! :)

love the metaphor & the rhyme, & how it's kept rather simple but it still has a lot of meaning. nice work.

~kait

Gives off a painful and enduring feel... I can totally relate to that.

Power of words is extraordinary: in such a short poem you conveyed so much... I like it. :)

I love this.Short and sweet , yet still has double and deeper meanings to it. It's a brilliant comparison i have never seen used before...Nothing wrong with it i say at all...lol.Except one thing that i noticed, that maybe it would be better if you put the " ..." After the last line rather then before it. Or maybe even before and after.I don't know.Now that i look at it the fourth time it doesn't seem bad and might actually fit it. Oh well, just a suggestion.The whole poem/prose if my favorite line. Mucho, Mucho :).