Reviews for Under the Texas Sun

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LittleLimerick83 2008-05-07 ch 7,	abuseGood cliffhanger. the only constructive criticism I can offer is that sometimes things seem a bit rushed. Just when I'm being pulled into a scene, I'm yanked out again. This could be your style, and it could certainly work, depending on the length of the story you're looking to write. If you want a longer story, perhaps you could sprinkle in a bit more character development. What you don't want to do is fill the story with too much "chitchat". Every time you write a chapter, ask yourself, "What's happening?" This is a little trick I learned at a writer's conference. Something always needs to be happening; action moves the story. Thus far, something has always been happening, which is essential to a good plot.
LittleLimerick83 2008-05-07 ch 6,	abuseyes, you are correct. My best friend told me as much. Technically you're considered a doctor once you have your degree. I'm off to read the next chapter now.
RavenStrike 2008-03-12 ch 6,	abuseWell, you could have updated sooner...lol(just kidding ^.^) Anyway, great chapter, I am so happy that you updated as soon as you did. I can't wait to see how the night turns out. Update again soon please!
Linece 2008-03-12 ch 6,	abuseI suck at guessings but I'll try. Hum, I'm sure she looks cute with her yellow dress. ♥ I'm wondering if you'll write more about Ray and Will story. It seems interesting! And God, i'm trying to find out why she's a doc now. Oh yeah, their night will be fun... for us, readers! grin Update soon!
LittleLimerick83 2008-03-02 ch 5,	abuseI think this chapter is by far the best thus far. I've enjoyed all of them, and the only real constructive criticism I can offer is that the others are perhaps just a bit too short. this one is a perfect length though. I'm very curious about what wil happen next. Just as a side note (and I could be wrong about this), but usually when you finish med school, you have to do your residency at a hospital before you can go off on your own into private practice. I'm not really too sure how it works, but I have a best friend who's actually in med school, and that was how he explained it to me. It doesn't really affect your plot; it's just a minor detail. (People correct me about stuff llike that all the time, so don't feel bad. Nine out of ten people won't even notice).
RavenStrike 2008-03-02 ch 5,	abuseI love it so far! Please update as soon as you can!
mickeyyearbook 2008-03-02 ch 5,	abuseit's just enough =] you're doing really well and i can't wait for the part with the dance!
Linece 2008-03-02 ch 5,	abuseNice story~ ♥ Yeah, Damien sounds really attractive... O and his eyes! I really like Alex too. She seems friendly and cool. I wonder why he did to her... Men are stupid, as usual! laughs But he doesn't want to give up. That's good! I want to read more. Update soon!
LittleLimerick83 2008-03-01 ch 1,	abuseFirstly, thanks so very much for your review. It means quite a lot to me. I'm certainly going to try to keep working on my story. It's funny that you mentioned carving out some time each tday for writing; I actually do that, but I'm also teaching and working on my Masters thesis, which drains a lot of the creative juices from my brain, so there's not much left for my own writing. I try though. Now, on to your story. I like this first chapter; it's intriguing. The first-person narration works increddibly well. I've really gotten into your narrator's head, even within this short chapter. I'll try to read more soon.
Wreckage 2006-12-27 ch 2,	abuseConsider this a review, because I like this story. I really REALLY wanna find out what happened between them... Bleh, frustrating! Okay, well, bye! Wreckage
a bitter kiss. 2006-12-26 ch 2,	abuseI like the descriptions! Though the chapters could be longer, it's up to you. :D
SSC and F13 2006-12-25 ch 2,	abusegreat story you have here! after leaving a quick review im probably gonna read some more of you're stories. i like it so far and once i like the first chapter i usually like the whole story! so keep it up!
Liquid-Sorrow 2006-03-21 ch 1,	abuseWow, you just keep starting stories don't you? I absolutely love the plot. =] Keep going with it. It's great. -Lqd
something i can never have 2006-02-23 ch 1,	abusehmm... very interesting. can't wait to see how you play this out... please update soon.
Out-Spoken-Runaway 2006-02-23 ch 1,	abuseAwesome story! Joo should update, it's intresting. ^ ^ Keep writing! XxFallingxX

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