This has a great truth to it, I like it. If you're not sure about it and you think there's something missing, you can always reread it and see if it needs anything more, but I think its great how it is.

Loved lines 10-14. Not sure? *psh* Amazing. Very Good. And other synonyms for wonderful. Keep writing.

Not sure about this one? I thought it was brilliant. A picture is worth a thousand words, ya know. Nice work!

Sterces

Woah, I really like this! What do you mean your not sure about it? Its really good. You described how some people are very well. I especially liked the second to last line. Simple, and yet made a point. Really nice.

Keep writing,

~Rhia