I liked this.

Sickening full of.. haunting? But at the same time, I pretty much love this kind of stuff.

I heard the meaning your poem is trying to get out.

And I applaud it.

I can only manage a few words in response...Magnificent. Powerful. Beautiful. Dark. I love it. It flows the way a wild river does; deep, crashing, destroying, beautiful, ever flowing, ever-changing, roaring and whispering...It screams of pain, love, night, lust, everything in the most beautiful of lover's daydreams and others nightmares. You have acheived wonders with this poem.

Then, I will submit completely. I am yours, your slave, but you must claim me

Wow! This is definitely one of your longer poems, and I noticed it also is much more set than your usual work. By that I mean it has more of a system...each stanza and each line and the rhyme scheme. Are you trying something different, or did it just happen that way?

nice, i like the detail and the sexyness of this, very well written!