   Shiro.Kokoro 2008-07-14 . chapter 1This is pretty much downright amazing. I really, really like it. Your writing is fantastic--and this story is SAD but still just awesome. |
 aberlemno 2008-06-02 . chapter 1I haven't seen much narrative poetry on this site, so it's great to find one, especially one this good. The imagery and details really make it one of those poems that you remember. |
 MisterRevolution 2008-01-29 . chapter 1This is really good. I enjoyed it. :) |
 love that's leaving 2008-01-20 . chapter 1I don't have to tell you that this is amazing. It's awful tragic, and I didn't want it to end.
Peace & Love
~> Hp |
| beyond.that.horizon 2007-03-26 . chapter 1 effing beautiful |
| servatis-a-pereculum 2006-09-28 . chapter 1 This is seriously one of your best pieces... |
| autumn berrington 2006-07-26 . chapter 1 very nice. its has a poetic fictiony feel to it! you have a great writing style!
~Autumn~ |
| juxtapositions 2006-05-24 . chapter 1 this is a beautiful reality. it thought you expressed real life with a perfect imperfection, without resorting to cliches and well-worn language. i loved it. |
 xAngel of SorrowX 2006-05-05 . chapter 1wow, this was really awesome. I like the story in it a lot. ^_^ |
| thesunflowerinyourhairr 2006-04-23 . chapter 1 wow.i am so speechless.this reminded me of me and one of good friends mixed together in your main character girl.gosh, this was exquisite.i think this might be my all time favorite.it's gorgeous. |
| Tanaboo 2006-04-13 . chapter 1 wow i never know what to say in these!! as brillant as always! i loved it x x x x |
| Iloveplotbunnies 2006-04-11 . chapter 1 Wow, I totally understand this poem and it's good I saw no problems with it and like I said it's really good. |
| multiples of six 2006-04-05 . chapter 1 Incredible. Remind me to never lose track of either of your accounts again. Not many authors could make me sit through an almost-700-word poem. These were my favourite parts: the first two lines, the arteries, "But she never did," the dreadlocks, "But the message was enough," and gah, the whole last stanza. |
| lozfairy 2006-03-25 . chapter 1 This is so beautiful, in a tragic, real-life sort of way. I love the descriptions...I really don't know what else to say about it, its the kind of thing you (well I) can't explain very well, But i know that I like this very,very much. |
 the naked civil servant 2006-03-20 . chapter 1i can't explain how much this shook me. it was like staring into a mirror, and jesus CHRIST, if the decline didn't sting. it felt like it ought to have been written in french - very Zola & such. but gorgeous. i applaud you. there is not enough cliche in today's world, and you raise it to an artform. lovelovel.o.v.e... |
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