The summary of the poem really caught my attention for some reason, and I am happy for it. This is a beautiful poem. The flow, the choice of words, and imagery really help bring everything together. Nicely done.

Words cannot describe how morbidly beautiful this poem is. It's just so gorgeous, so sad, & yet so completely beauitful. God, I love this.

Wow! Very sad. Amazing.

le gasp. and i am so amazed. wonderful everything, it runs like a story but is most definitely a poem. so sad, but i loved it :) great job!

that was fabulously beautiful. I love this sort of poetry that has a story. What inspired this? What poets are you reading?

This is brilliant! I'm not always very good at giving articulate reviews,so just know that I adore this. It's tragic yet beautiful.

Wow. This is so well written, I have bno idea how you were able to get the entire thing to flow so right. I love it.

beautifully writen

i absolutly love the last line"and voices don't carry in the dark"it almost gave me chills...haha

That opening line top class quality, eye opening, oblivious to cliche, perfect, amazing, beautiful ,underrated, endlessly, and every other expression I haven't found yet.

I found myself getting a little lost in the depth of the stanzas, they're chunky and solid. But not negatively though, it works it's just a thought I had..could be less gluey maybe with a formatting tweak.

Excellent work though!

Horribly sad, yet beautifully written. I like it a lot!

Christine

P.S. The "12 stars" reference was from the book of Revelations. And thanks for the review! )

Gosh this is so sad. It reminds me of this girl at my school (in the first couple of stanzas). She isnt 16 yet but I bet that when she turns it she'll leave.

This is one of those poems that deserves a really good, constructive, well-put-together review. Unfortunately, I'm not one of those people who can give those kind of reviews. I'm just an ameture. So I'll leave it at this: It's my kind of fairytale. And you...You're my kind of writer! Beyond good, beyond great, beyond words. ;)

Beautiful. Actually, all of the adjectives that I know don't give this poem justice, so I'll simply leave you at that-your poem was beautiful and you should keep writing.

Peace.

wow... i really feel for this pom. truly meaningful and well written awesome work

keep writing!

so tragic... so sad... and yet so moving...

a great job how you made me feel i know her even through so little time. so rare do i find such poems having a good story told. keep it up!

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