|Reviews for State of paralysis|
| NeverComeDown 2/27/06 . chapter 1
The summary of the poem really caught my attention for some reason, and I am happy for it. This is a beautiful poem. The flow, the choice of words, and imagery really help bring everything together. Nicely done.
| classic violet 2/27/06 . chapter 1
Words cannot describe how morbidly beautiful this poem is. It's just so gorgeous, so sad, & yet so completely beauitful. God, I love this.
| Farran 2/27/06 . chapter 1
Wow! Very sad. Amazing.
| i am pookie 2/27/06 . chapter 1
le gasp. and i am so amazed. wonderful everything, it runs like a story but is most definitely a poem. so sad, but i loved it :) great job!
| are you from mejico 2/26/06 . chapter 1
that was fabulously beautiful. I love this sort of poetry that has a story. What inspired this? What poets are you reading?
| moonardordragon 2/26/06 . chapter 1
This is brilliant! I'm not always very good at giving articulate reviews,so just know that I adore this. It's tragic yet beautiful.
| goddessofmoondreams 2/26/06 . chapter 1
Wow. This is so well written, I have bno idea how you were able to get the entire thing to flow so right. I love it.
| Liquid Block of Fire 2/26/06 . chapter 1
i absolutly love the last line"and voices don't carry in the dark"it almost gave me chills...haha
| in theory 2/26/06 . chapter 1
That opening line top class quality, eye opening, oblivious to cliche, perfect, amazing, beautiful ,underrated, endlessly, and every other expression I haven't found yet.
I found myself getting a little lost in the depth of the stanzas, they're chunky and solid. But not negatively though, it works it's just a thought I had..could be less gluey maybe with a formatting tweak.
Excellent work though!
| ode to a firefly 2/26/06 . chapter 1
Horribly sad, yet beautifully written. I like it a lot!
P.S. The "12 stars" reference was from the book of Revelations. And thanks for the review! )
| boys kiss girls 2/25/06 . chapter 1
Gosh this is so sad. It reminds me of this girl at my school (in the first couple of stanzas). She isnt 16 yet but I bet that when she turns it she'll leave.
| cherrycoke 2/25/06 . chapter 1
This is one of those poems that deserves a really good, constructive, well-put-together review. Unfortunately, I'm not one of those people who can give those kind of reviews. I'm just an ameture. So I'll leave it at this: It's my kind of fairytale. And you...You're my kind of writer! Beyond good, beyond great, beyond words. ;)
| foodisgood 2/25/06 . chapter 1
Beautiful. Actually, all of the adjectives that I know don't give this poem justice, so I'll simply leave you at that-your poem was beautiful and you should keep writing.
| mizu no kokoro 2/24/06 . chapter 1
wow... i really feel for this pom. truly meaningful and well written awesome work
| cygnus olor 2/23/06 . chapter 1
so tragic... so sad... and yet so moving...
a great job how you made me feel i know her even through so little time. so rare do i find such poems having a good story told. keep it up!
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