Aw, I like how you write. Its sweet and all. :D I like your rhythm and rhyme, it makes it easy to read. :DKeep writing. :D

I love all the metaphorical lines and how you made them all rhyme. It's very vivid. I love it!

Fascinating piece; both emotional and complex. Wonderful use of passion and depth, keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.