That's awesome! It kind of reminds me of the first thing I submitted to FictionPress, just last night! But either way, back to the review. It was good writing, with a few single mistakes, though they are barely visible.

That's really all that I can see that matters, to a reviews point of view. So there you go!
If you could, please stop by either of my stories and have a look.

--Vincent Alliath

This was good. I liked it. There was one thing I noticed. The words "It's."Like here: "every last drop of it's golden gift..." it doesnt need an apostrophe. When it's like "It's a wonderful day!" then the word needs an apostrophe. I just thought that would help. I really enjoyed this story. Keep up the good work.

~Sevidian