Okay, bad news or good news first? Let's go with the bad(well, it's not necessarily bad). I always thought that Sonnets (especially Elizabethan ones)were supposed to be written in iambic pentameter, or ten syllables per line. This sonnet doesn't really pull that off.

Good news! I LOVE IT! The topic, I mean. It's awesome! I really like the first four lines! They rock!

~dragonzz~

i know the feeling excatly, good job, and excelant work. right now i deff. feel whatever you must have felt while you where writing. it's one thing to have a well written poem but i poem ppl can relate 2... thumbs up on you