Awesome! My favourite lines:

"My heart, scarcely beating,My spirit, eternally screaming."

keep writing =)

Sometimes I can't help but wonder what was going through your mind while writing this. Really great. Wished it was longer, though.

short, sweet, and right to the point. The meter's a bit awkward in some spots, but good job, I like!

x3 yay for infinite sleep

This was great.